The changes of shot/view of the pear shaped object are too
sudden/jarring. Perhaps they could do with some sort of smoothing transition ?
The music/audio background does not fit the visual.
It seems to fade in at the start of the picture and fade out at the end of the picture, at points that are not the start and finish of the piece. The effect is that it has been 'put there', to avoid having no sound at all to accompany the picture.
Thank you for your feedback. I agree some of the shots have jarring cuts. Also the sounds fade in fade out 'placed there' effect is deliberate so I'm glad that worked. I'm working on a follow up piece that will give more of a life to the object and explain its function. This should also make the reason it is the way it is more apparent.
Could you give me feedback on the actual maya render? I was looking for more criticism on the quality of that so I can get better at my 3D modelling work. Anything to make it better.