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Bradley Stearn
First ever short film
on Dec 31, 2011 at 5:28:38 pm

Hey everyone

This is my first ever short film as a college student, I shot it in my own time.

I know there are mistakes within it, however I can learn from these.

Can I have some constructive criticism please.

Red Spectrum Pictures -

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Rick Wise
Re: First ever short film
on Dec 31, 2011 at 6:41:38 pm

A great first film. Since you ask for suggestions:

  • motivate lighting: the small desk lamp should be your key, or appear to be. If you were to place the lamp on the left of the typewriter, and supplement it with a very small, snooted light on the actor's face, you would achieve more of a noire look. Then possibly add a very, very small amount of bounce fill, or not.

  • lighting cont.: reinforce the monolog: when day comes (he wrote all through the night he says) then daylight should be coming through the window curtains.

  • variety of shots: try some additional angles; for instance, cheat the table forward and try some close-ups with the camera shooting over the typewriter, from down low. Fortunately your read of his monolog carries us along, but I got visually bored with the same shot of your "hero."

  • make sure we can read important props: it's not clear what's sticking out of his back.

  • Rick Wise
    San Francisco Bay Area

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