My first reaction is that it is very choppy, there doesn't seem to be a flow to your reel at all. Next, I had noticed that some of the graphic pieces just pop on or pop off (Capturing the beauty of life) it should either be a quick transition or have it pop off when the bottom part of the frame is white. The bridal trends section, I would have started with the bride walking down the runway first then have the other pieces ome after so you set up what is coming. Also same thing here with the pop on, the runway model just pops on, you could put a soft wipe or a 20 frame dissolve to bring in the model. It seemed very harsh to pop in like it did.
This is a good start for a demo reel if you do not have a lot of content to add.