Re: Adrift - UW conservation film

Very nice visuals! That's both a beautiful and a disturbing piece. As TJ mentioned, I think the sound design could a bit of attention. You did such a great job with the visuals, I'd hate to see (or in this case hear) the audio detract from them.

Music tells us how we should feel about what we are seeing and you selected a nice background of sound that does that, but another 15 minutes concentrating on sound would really help.

For instance, at 1:32, the audio cut is very abrupt and still in the middle of a musical phrase, which is probably intended to give the viewer a sense of displacement or a sudden jarring effect. But, since it has no "exclamation point", such as a cymbal crash or big sound at the end, it sounds like a mistake in the edit. If you are going to switch gears suddenly and don't want to end with a big sound, you should still pay attention to the musical crescendo so that when you take the sound away suddenly your intent is clear.

I know that natural sound may be impossible to get while shooting some of this footage, but it would add some power if we could hear the sickening sound of fish flapping in the buckets or (most especially) the sound of the explosion at 3:45. If I didn't have that sound at 3:45, I'd foley something in to give it that effect.

I'd also agree that you could trim this down to about half the length and be just as effective. I don't know if you had to hit a target time, but as much as I liked seeing the beautiful footage, it did go a little long for the small screen. I imagine that if I saw this projected on a 12 foot high screen, I wouldn't have that opinion.

Just wondering… Is the text “ghost’s” onscreen at 2:00 referencing a possessive from of the word “ghost” or should it read “ghosts”?

Nice composite work, by the way. Very good overall!