Re: Wounded Soldier lives the dream at Rock and Roll Fantasy Camp

24 hours straight editing? No wonder to more you look at it, the worse it feels, that's because you feel worse and it wouldn't matter what story you were editing. Take a break, sleep on it for a few nights, stretch and relax.

I think this is a great start. I hear what you are saying about the fine line of war and fantasy. That can be a hard story to tell and even harder to mix. Consider breaking up the parts instead of combining them (although it's a nice execution in what you have done there). I'd start with the gravity of war, then transition into the fantasy of the camp. Or perhaps you start with the camp, introduce Jason and the war, then introduce the two of them together. Treat the camp as a character and introduce it to the audience instead of letting us try and guess what it is. I would also consider focusing the music in vignettes, rather than have the music as a bed throughout, which will help introduce the music as another character. Use the music as the bond that holds these two worlds together and while you have the music in there, it should be showcased a little more and made a little bit more 'special'. Does that make sense? It's hard to know what to say because I don't know what you have in terms of story for your interviews, but if you can a little more introduction to everyone might help to let us in on what's going on. It feels a bit hurried at the moment, not bad at all, just a little hurried. Having him sit at the drum set for the interview was a nice idea.

Jeremy