Re: My Demo, Please give comments

Good day Bob,

Your demo isn't bad if you are doing a marketing video for either airplanes or computers. I'll give you my list, overall, I thought it was too long for what you had content wise. I'd lose the talking head person all together, next since you don't have a lot to work with I'd make the overall piece much shorter. This will give it more energy, but keep you segments together. Cut the plane stuff into on vignette and the computer stuff into another vignette. Don't intercut the two as you have done now. I was not expecting to go back to airplanes after the 1st computer segment and then back to planes. What I took away from your demo is that this is all you have done in 12 years and that in your demo you had to reprise it twice. I think if you would condense these two and your open, it would look a little more polished.

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